Thriller Sequence Final Draft Idea

The setting is an average apartment, but the audience can see that the people are rather wealthy, nice bedroom and bathroom. The scene starts with shots of the bathroom and bed room to establish that. There is a girl in the bed. Around there room there's drugs, alcohol, passports and a revolver. The man wakes up leaning against the bathtub or on the floor of the bathroom. He is obviously very hungover, he wakes up, puts on some clothes and does a line of coke. He then exits the bathroom and he sees the girl slowly waking up. There will be a few lines of dialog and woman will be portrayed as a very conventional, stereotypical role of a female. He then gets a phone call from someone, he picks up the phone, and it is established that there is a job that he has to do implying that he is part of the mafia or he is a hit-man.

 He starts talking about the job in front of the girl, not really caring that she is there. He says something like 'Nah, sorry I can't do it today I'm too fucked up' and the man on the other side says something like 'Just do it'. She then slowly gets up from the bed, she puts on some sort of clothing and the shots are switching back and forth from her to him and her in the background. She slowly approaches the man as he his busy negotiating himself out of the job. She then picks up the revolver from the table, shoots the man dead, picks up the phone and says 'I'll do it.', hangs up and scene ends.

Thriller Sequence What Happens Next- First Draft Idea

Based on the initial discussions with your group, what do you plan to do next?

Since concluding the 'first draft' of our idea, we have been out shooting a test scenes and sequences. Using actors from our group and areas around the school we filmed a several shots and with the test footage put together a very short sequence to give the group an idea of what the film may look like. It was also helpful to explore how we were going to execute the shots and put things more into perspective. Today, we gave a pitch to Mike about our idea and he gave us lots of useful feedback, although we didn't have much time to talk about it, we did manage to concluded that we were going to give the woman in the scene much bigger of a part and take out the scenes with the razor. The rough idea that we discussed was, the man was going to wake up in the same place, leaning against the bathtub, he would have obviously have had a rough night. There will still be drugs and alcohol in the scene, he will then get a call from his boss and they will start discussing the a job for him to do. He doesn't realise that his wife/girlfriend is in the room as he is too out of it and his wife starts getting mad and packs up her stuff and tries to leave him. This is all we have got to so far and will continue developing the idea tomorrow. The next stages are beginning to formula this idea to pitch to Matt next Friday.

Getting into groups and the process of deciding on an idea.

This process for us was relatively simple, we were given our group. This was really good, I was really pleased with the people I was put with. Our group dynamic is really good as there is no one who is really taking control of everything, the roles are all quite balanced.  I feel our group has a good range of skills and quite similar ideas therefore it was really easy to combined our ideas together. We took Matt’s as a basis and added elements from Kami and I’s ideas. With this initial idea we were able to expand, take that idea further and contribute to coming up with an idea together.


The thriller will open with establishing shots of the bedroom and bathroom (Warm lightning and positive sounds) constantly interrupted by shots of the protagonist shaving which eventually cuts to the protagonist in a pool of blood on the bathroom floor. Afterwards the protagonist gets up and puts on clothes and bandages around the cuts on his arm (Cold lightning and non-diegetic disturbing music and sounds effects). Following the main character, he enters the bedroom in which there is a girl sleeping who wakes up. The two begin to chat, during in which the protagonist mood lightens and his depression is hidden  (lightning stays cold but music and sounds turn positive). After a certain time the main characters phone rings, to which he answers, talks for a couple of seconds, picks up his items from the bedroom, says his goodbyes to the girl in bed and exists the setting.

Thriller Sequence Initial Idea and Presentation

The idea that I chose to present was the one with the razor blade. A brief synopsis of this idea is based around a middle aged man. He wakes up in his very average apartment and he goes over to the mirror in his room to shave. He takes out his cutthroat razor and begins to shave as he is shaving, there is a big emphasis on the sound as it is the one building the tension. It begins off playing a rather happy song, a little bit contrapuntal to the scene but as the scene progress the music becomes distorted and sharp, building tension for the rest of the scene. After the man finishes shaving he pierces his own skin with the razor to make sure it is sharp enough and the camera focuses on his reflection on in the mirror then focuses out and on the to the background, still through the reflection of the mirror, and the audience can see a man or woman tied up behind him. You can see the body bloody and almost passed out, the body stirs for a moment realizes that the man is awake. They then being to wriggle around in the restrains and there is muffled screaming heard from the mouth as it is covered up by a cloth. The camera then refocuses on the man face in the reflection, the man then sadistically smiles and turns his back to the mirror and walks towards the person, razor in hand. There is then a black out.

Presenting to the class and having the class present to us was really helpful to develop my idea further and in addition to that I was able to think of new ideas or variations of ideas. Firstly, presenting to the class helped me because of the feedback that they gave me ideas that I could have included within my idea. For example, they said that I could have more of a tension build up in my idea. They also said that they liked how much I took into account sound and how simple yet effective my idea was. As well as this, hearing the class present their ideas was really good as well. It gave me an overall perspective of what the general idea was and I was able to see a clearer picture of who I could see myself working with in the group because of the similarity in our ideas. There were aspects of my classmates ideas that I could see in my idea or a different way to progress my own idea with a combination of someone else’s idea.